Hi Joseph,
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Band score: 8.5
Very, very well done. You have highlighted a number of significant features of the data and presented it clearly and with excellent control over a variety of sentence types and vocabulary.
Content: excellent
Organization: very good (although it is rather long)
Register: good
Vocabulary: outstanding! I highlighted a number of phrases in blue which are perfectly suited to this task. All of the figures in the graph are increasing, but you use a variety of adjectives to modify the word increase effectively. You might consider using increase as a verb for more variety or also the word grow/growth.
Grammar: very good! No errors at all and excellent range of sentences and tenses!
You can see specific comments about your writing in the document here: Joseph IELTS Part 1 You can reply to the comments, ask questions, edit and/or download the document from my Google Drive.
Band score: 7.5
Good work. You have answered the question well and provided a number of relevant examples. The paragraphs are well-organized and linked efficiently and simply in a way that helps build your argument. Very good understanding and control of the target structure for this type of essay. The errors are very minor and there is almost no effect on communication.
Content: very good
Organization: good (but again, this is rather long)
Register: very good, formal and consistent throughout
Vocabulary: quite good, I’ve highlighted some of the words and phrases that I particularly like in blue. You might want to watch out for repetition at towards the end of your writing (wide range and boundless both appear twice in the last two paragraphs), but this is a very minor issue, especially when you are not repeating simple or common words like big or good.
Grammar: OK, you show an excellent control over verbs and articles and you’ve just made some small mistakes. Some of these might just be typing mistakes. None of the errors cause the reader a problem in understanding your point of view, nor do they indicate any lack of knowledge on your part.
You can see specific comments about your writing in the document here: Joseph IELTS Part 2 You can reply to the comments, ask questions, edit and/or download the document from my Google Drive.
Band score: 7.5-8
Comments: Very good! You answer the questions well, with good details and reasons. You connect your ideas together efficiently and you show a wide range of appropriate vocabulary. Your control of grammar is also very good.
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Band score: 7.5-8
Comments: Very good! You answer the questions well, with good examples and expanding your answers. You show a range of vocabulary and sentence styles, and your performance in part 2 (when you must speak alone) was also very good: you covered all areas of the question and connected them together effectively and efficiently. There were very few errors during the test and none of them had a negative effect on communication.
You can listen to the recording below and see my comments as you listen. If you put the mouse over one of the tiny pictures of my face in the image of the recording, you can read the comment.
To save the file, click on the word “Joseph2” and you will go to the Soundcloud page. Below the image of the recording, you will find a button to download it, it is a picture of an arrow pointing down. You can also see my comments better on this page, some of them will appear on the right below the image of the recording. You will see some text like “16 comments View All,” click here and the full comments will open on a new page.
